My name, Christopher
Christopher, its sound is powerful with a sting. yet smooth with its undermining tone. it's feeling is as solid and cold as steel, yet warm and comfortable to its touch. When I hear the call of my name I turn to answer its call like a phone ringing that has an urgent message. The memories in which this name holds are ones of hope to despair. Happiness to sorrow. The memories of rising and falling, yet it also holds aspiration of dreams. Dreams that turned into goals. goals that became life long challenges. From the memories of this name came a sense of serenity and peace. Peace in which comforts me, Shields me from the anarchy of my name. The anarchy that also came with this name. Its memories of pain that came from its past, hurts like a boxers jab. Quick and steady. Its flow, rather than its rush of emotions are so strong that it becomes a fatal blow to me, critical condition. Even though the ups and downs of this name are difficult, it has given me one thing that no one else has. That is me, me as a person. A person that's like no other, a regular but different human being. Whether it be a buffoon to a dunce, to a problem solver to a instigator. I am me and the name Christopher Whitney, belongs to me.
I loved how you put lots of emotions behind what you were saying.
ReplyDeleteI loved your use of descriptive words, metaphors, and similes.
ReplyDeleteNice vocabulary
ReplyDeleteWhy do you feel your name has such sorrow and hurt?
ReplyDeleteYou had really great sentence structure that really added to the overall message!
ReplyDeleteI loved how much thought was behind your wording. You could tell you took your time and gave your best effort. It really shows. You have a natural writing ability!
ReplyDeleteI really liked your personification style writing in the beginning if you know what I mean. Really good job Chris
ReplyDeleteI like how you described your name as many things that still in the end you say you name was you. So Great Job :):):)!!!!!
ReplyDeleteChristopher,
ReplyDeleteI love the similes and metaphors you used in your writing. These added to the imagery of your writing.
I like how you used words that gave images about something else. Like the boxing thing you said. The quick jab ?short but to the point and very creative.
ReplyDeleteVery good vocabulary and very nice loud speaking voice. Good job
ReplyDeleteI liked how you said you are like no other. Good job
ReplyDeletei love not only the emotion you put behind you poem but how you used (personification?)
ReplyDeleteYour figurative language gave your writing depth, something that can be hard to achieve with many writers.
ReplyDeleteI liked how you put I am me and this name belongs to me good job :)
ReplyDeleteIt's a mix between a poem and a journal...interesting
ReplyDeleteYou had a lot of figurative language inside your post. I like you you used a lot of analogies and smilies, they're definitely your strongest element in the writing.
ReplyDeleteWell done . I like how you mentioned your name as has yet a smoothing tone, because when I hear your name or see you I think of a very calm wave .( if that makes sense)
ReplyDeleteI don't like how you stole my background though :D
ReplyDeleteI liked how you connected, for lack of a better word, certain things to show progression. "happiness to sorrow" "dreams to goals"
ReplyDeleteI loved how you described your name as powerful with a sting. Very interesting
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